Paper 1 response

"As I watched, the sun broke weakly through, brightened the rich red of the fawns, and kindled their white spots."

The verb "kindled" connotes a gentle, gradual entrance of the fawns. It has a soft feeling associated with it and I think it draws a parallel between the sun "breaking weakly" and the fawns spots kindling. When I think of fawns, the immediate feeling that comes to mind is violent and harsh. However, the diction in this paragraph establishes a light, less abrupt tone.

Personally, I think it would weaken the phrase as the sun broke weakly through sets up the overall tender tone of the phrase, with the soft verb "kindled". The verb "bursts" has a more violent feel to it.