Practising Writing Concisely

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  1. Outline two ways in which Pilkington gives you a sense of perspective in the first 8 lines of the text?

In the text, Pilkington talks about his thoughts and his emotions and he also gives his opinion about the hotel. In the text, he uses uses "I" which creates a first person perspective

  1. Identify two ways in which the author makes the description of the toad killings memorable

To make the toad killings memorable, Pilkington used humour, he relates what it happening with himself (gives personal examples) and uses gruesome description and also

  1. Select two examples of humour from the text and analyse the effect of each on the reader

The first example of humour in the text was when the writer talks about The Great Wall of China“ ‘Great’ Wall of China … Alright Wall of China”. This moment creates a sense of humour towards the readers because normally, no one would say anything about the Great Wall of China but in this text, we can see the author talk about the Great Wall of China as if there is no importance to it and it doesn’t have any value.

The second example of humour in this text is when the author says “... I have 2 goldfish in a bowl. I’m not sure if they’re for company or for a snack”. This part of the text also creates humour because the author talks about China being a place where they eat dogs (which are pets) so when he says if the goldfish are for company or for a snack, it strikes the reader as if it is a joke.

Short Film

  1. Outline two ways in which sound plays a role in this scene. (Do not include comments on the use of voice-over here).

In this short film, we can hear diegetic and non-diegetic sounds. For example, we can hear that Pilkington talking and the people in the scene talking in the background and we can also hear the music that has been added after filming the scene.

  1. What is the overall effect of the voice-over in this extract? Select two examples of voice over commentary and analyse their effect on the viewer

When the man is eating the eggs, the use of his voice over is really helpful. I think this because when I am watching the video clip, then I can hear what Pilkington is saying along with what it is that he is talking about.

Another example of the voice over effect is when we see the man with the toads. I think that the voice over in this part of the clip has a small impact on the viewer. I think this because with the voice over we can see what is happening along with seeing it but in this part of the clip, if there was no voiceover, then there wouldn’t be a huge impact on the scene.

  1. Outline two ways in which Pilkington makes the scorpion eating scene humorous through his spoken language in the scene. Give an example of each.

When Pilkington is talking about the woman eating the scorpions, he talks about the way she is looking at her food. He talks about how she has 2 sticks and is looking at the ‘good parts’ of the food to eat. This scene is humorous because normally, we do that with food which would taste good, but seeing what she was eating, it doesn’t seem like that would be something that we would eat.

When Pilkington is talking about the spider in the woman’s bathroom, he talks about what she would do. “I’ll eat that croissant for tomorrow”. This creates humour because normally, croissants are something that we would enjoy to eat for breakfast and spiders are something that we would be afraid of and would like to avoid whereas this scene shows us the exact opposite of what we would do.

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Analytical Comparison prose Extract and film Scene

In chapter 10, page 145 of Touching the void, and Season 2 episode 6 of Ray Mears survival, we can see that the two situations they both are in are similar but their reactions are not. They both are in a different state of mind about being in a marooned situation. Joe is marooned on a snowy mountain while Ray is marooned on a tropical island. In the video, we can see that Ray's feelings and emotions were calmer, more peaceful and happy. Whereas, in the third text of Touching the void, Joe describes his feelings with words like weariness, confused and guilty. Another way we can tell that Joe and Ray's feeling were different is when Joe says "my frostbitten fingers became the most common excuse" and when Ray says "this is what I couldn't see last night, paradise". Joe keeps trying to look at the negatives and keeps on blaming his hands for being frozen, and Ray looks at the positives, he doesn't pay attention to the fact that he is trapped on the island, but he instead he sees the island as "paradise".

In the film scene, there were a lot of diegetic and non-diegetic sounds. For example, for diegetic sounds, we can hear the waves and the sound of the trees moving. For the non-diegetic sounds, we can hear the calm/happy/upbeat music and also some voice overs. The use of these sounds tells us that this wasn't such a scary situation after all. They had also used bright colours to show this to us.

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Touching the Void - How emotion is conveyed through music and sound - Rushil Shah

In this scene, from 1:31:10 mins to 1:34:09, they used music and sound to convey his emotions. They did this by showing how using all of these sounds:

  • The wind: They had the sound of the wind in the background for a lot of the shot. They had this at a low pitch when voiceover Joe was talking.
  • Him breathing and whimpering: During this scene, we could hear Joe breathing and whimpering really loudly.
  • The rocks moving: They showed us Joe moving and squeezing the rocks around trying to fight the pain that he was going through
  • Him talking (voiceover which was loud and clear)
  • Loud sound effects: When Joe was losing his mind, they had added loud non-diegetic sounds. When they did that, they had it at a really high volume to show us how hard it was for him to try to focus and not lose his mind
  • Scary music and talking effect (echos): When Joe was muttering some word to himself, or when he was singing, he would do it in this scary talking effect. This effect was added after the shot was taken (so it was a non-diegetic sound). This was done to show us, the viewers, his mental state.
  • Metal hitting the rocks: When he was on the ground, trying to stay in one piece, we can hear his ice pickaxe hitting the stones. This shows us that he was trying to get back us and try to keep on moving.
  • Heart beating: His heart beating was also added in after the shot was taken but it was showing us what he was going through. This sound was helping us in feeling what Joe was feeling.

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Touching the Void - Movie Scene Analysis - Rushil Shah

This scene is was portraying the first big incident on Joe and Simon's journey. They have made this scene look really stressful. The use of sound is well used in this scene. They added non-diegetic sounds to this scene, for example, suspenseful music. They did this to create an environment of fear and foreshadowing. I think that this scene is really important because it shows us the difficulties Joe and Simon had to go through on their journey. It also tells us that anything can go wrong at anytime and that could really effect how everything else would pan out. The use of camera angles was also well used.

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Touching the Void - Analysis of Different Effects - Rushil Shah

Analysis of Different Effects
In the extract from Touching the Void, by Joe Simpson, in chapter 1, the mood seems to be peaceful and exciting since it is an introduction to Joe’s passion and mountaineering. The author creates this mood through words that connote these feelings in order to describe his thoughts and the scenic view; For example, “calming”, “tranquil”, “independence” and “glistening”.

In this extract, we can see that Joe found it to be calming when he was up in the mountains, alone, isolated by everyone else. “For the first time in my life I knew what it meant to be isolated from people and society. It was wonderfully calming and tranquil to be here”. In this quote, the word isolated is used in the same manner but it doesn’t give off the same energy. The main function of this passage is to show Joe’s passion for mountaineering through his feeling of freedom and peace. Simon wanted to try and reach the top as soon as he could whereas Joe took his time and was appreciating the scene. This tells us that Joe really does want to fulfil his dream and wants to take pride while doing so.

What I did and Wanted to do this year - Rushil Shah

This summer, I had developed an interest to go swimming. In the past, I did not go swimming very often. I would only go if it was a party or if friends were meeting. But around the end of my 9th grade, I started to grow interested. In the summer, I went swimming many times and because I went many times, I realised that I wanted to learn a couple of new tricks. I went swimming here, in Belgium, and also where I went on holiday, in India. I was in Belgium for about 2 to 3 weeks after the holiday started and I went swimming almost every alternate day. For the days I was in India, I did not go swimming as much but I still tried to go every alternate day. At the start, I used to go swimming alone, which was fine. But later I decided to go with some friends and when I went with them, it got a lot more fun because, with them, I could use a lot of their tricks and a lot of their advice. When I went swimming in India, I went with my cousins. I managed to learn some of the easy but not basic moves for swimming but later this year, I want to learn some complex swimming tricks, and also try to improve my speed while I am swimming. If possible, then I will try to go swimming with a friend and as them, if they could keep giving me tips on how to swimming better.